
"Making the Grade" (revision)
Many schools hold students to a high standard, and to help them achieve that standard they encourage the students to do their best. Due to this standard, some may crash and burn, while others just don’t have the ability to become that sought-after student. This doesn’t always contribute to work ethic, however, as students have a life outside of school that teachers and educators don’t fully know or understand. Although this is true, most teachers believe that they can judge their students on performance alone, as they have seen them in class and in the hallways. Not only is this untrue, but it can be incredibly bad for some students as they may need some help to unlock a potential greatness that cannot be seen in schoolwork. To help students, teachers should reconsider judging their students on work and performance alone and look into what else is affecting them, as they could have a potential greater than an educator may see at first.
Every student is different, and as a result each student has different needs. For example, a student with ADD/ADHD should be helped so that they can have easier focus on what is going on. Another example is a student with difficulty reading, whether it be dyslexia or eye problems, should be assisted when having to read a novel in literature. However, these needs aren’t always met by teachers, and are often relabeled as laziness or a short attention span. Disorders can also appear in students, and although they may not be common, they can appear in some of the best students and hinder their ability to work properly in a school environment. Even with all of this, teachers will often glaze over these facts and fully believe that the child they’re teaching is just lazy, when in reality the student is trying their best. Lack of effort to help students is found in many schools, specifically from the teachers. Educators need to understand that not all students are giving up in school because they just don’t feel like doing the work, but because they cannot handle it anymore and have too many obstacles in the way. As teachers don’t see this, they only see “problematic” students who don’t try, and these teachers only believe that if they “give their all” that they will be truly successful in school. They’re usually wrong, as most students do give their all while in school, with some students’ all being below average.
School, as a construct, is not a fair way to judge a student’s overall character and ability. Focus is put on academics and not so much on performing arts or being a good person. In fact, most of the time school’s focus on getting high grades can be harmful for some students, as they can begin to see themselves as less important and useless due to only being good for grades and school. Scientists have proven that the brain of a student (ages 18 and under) only begins to fully function at 10 AM, which is two to three hours after school begins for most. Added to this, most students view school negatively because it drains them of feeling and forces them to work for around 8 hours a day, 5-6 days a week. Studies have shown that school is a leading reason for depression in teens, and even without depression most students don’t feel happy at school. With all of these negative emotions weighing down on students every day, teachers should think about how a student would do in school if they didn’t have to deal with so much. A possible change towards students from teachers could take the stress off of them, and allow them to accomplish more than what their limits allow.
Although students and teachers aren’t always the best of friends, they should still be able to understand each other and why they do what they do. Students don’t always mean to slack off, they may just be having a hard time at home or an episode of a mental illness. Teachers should be mindful of the information they’re given by students, and ask if they can help in any way if a child is failing their class. They shouldn’t just base their opinions on students off of how well they can take a test or their skill in writing timed essays. All pupils have the potential to be great, yet they may need help to find it, and so educators should be mindful of this.
“Making The Grade” (original)
Many schools hold students to a high standard, and do what they can to encourage students to do their best. Some students crash and burn under the pressure, while others simply do not have the ability to do well in school. While students spend most of their lives at school, they still have a life outside of school that teachers do not know fully. Most teachers will believe they know students well enough to judge them on performance alone. However, many students have great potential that they need help unlocking, and many times this cannot be seen in schoolwork. As this is the case, many teachers should reconsider judging their students on performance alone, as one’s potential could be great and yet invisible to the eye of an educator.
All students are different and have different needs. For example, a student with attention problems should be helped so that they can focus, and a student who has trouble reading should also be assisted when having to read a novel in literature. However, these needs aren’t alway addressed by teachers, and are often relabeled as laziness and easily distracted. disorders are also common in students, which hinder their ability to work properly in a school environment. Teachers commonly glaze over this fact, and believe that a child that is doing their best is just lazy. Lack of effort to help kids and students is found in many schools, not from the students, but from the teachers, as they only care to see their academic performance in school rather than what they could do if given the necessary help. Even without disorders, many students still will not give their all in class unless motivated to do so, and many teachers are not the best cheerleaders. Most teachers also believe that if their “problematic” student actually tried and did not let their needs obstruct their work, then they will get anything they believe accomplished. they’re wrong, most of the time.
School itself is not a place to judge a student’s overall character and ability, and has been found to be harmful for some. Scientists have proven that the brain of a student (usually a child) does not fully function until 10 AM. Most schools, however, start at seven and eight in the morning, which warps the brain’s functionality for a few hours. Added to this, most students view school in a negative light because it drains them of feeling and forces them to work for at least eight hours a day. Studies have shown that school is a leading reason for depression in teens, and many students do not feel well at school. With all of this weighing down on students day to day, teachers should take consideration in how a student could do if school was less strenuous on them, rather than how it currently is. A student’s performance is constantly brought down by the existence of current-day school and what they must go through to be successful in it.
Students and teachers, admittedly, do not alway have the best relationship. Some teachers are overbearing or too tough on their students, and in return these students will despise them. However, this should never mean that a student lacks potential. In fact, no student should be judged specifically on performance in class, as they have much more to offer than how well they can take a test or what their skill in writing an essay while timed is. All students have potential to be great, yet they cannot always unlock it, and as a result teachers should help them, not hinder through multitudes of work and not caring about what can make their students truly successful.
“Making the Grade Revision” Reflection
Ever since I wrote this piece, I wanted to rewrite it. I was never really proud of it, and since it was a timed essay, I knew I could do better given I had the appropriate amount of resources and time. Now that I have a chance to rewrite it, I feel I’ve added to it and made it easier to read. Originally, I was very redundant in writing this essay, and I reused multiple words in the same paragraph; I also have information that was unnecessary. Even though I can’t go back to the article and actually answer the prompt (I honestly don’t remember it), I feel I did well with what I have available to my rewrite.
In the revision, I tried to explain what the original said with better words. I made it more coherent, and tried to prove the point more clearly.The original’s evidence wasn’t worded very well, and wasn’t very strong, and so I decided that I would provide more coherent evidence. I also changed the conclusion paragraph so that it ended the essay correctly.